Here's my version of the page:
And the original:
Things I learned:
-- At first glance, the page appears to be split into two equal panels, but actually the top panel is a few millimeters taller than the bottom, and the margin between them is drawn at a slightly sloping angle.
-- Look at all that "Tatsumi Crackle" in panel one! (The round, ambiguous white shapes that serve only to modify the composition/relate visually to the expressionistic depiction of the moon/sun.)
-- Of course the telephone pole is leaning (as almost all of them do in real life), but this is something that only an astute observer would remember to draw.
-- Sometimes one point perspective is a very nice thing (panel two). Compare this tighter, more realistic perspective to the wild perspective of panel one, where the buildings are claustrophobically falling in on the street.
-- Love the way the handlebars of the scooter are tilted to the side. (Of course I forgot to draw them this way...)
-- Haha-- that first guy from the left in panel one-- I barely had to alter things to draw him in my own style!